Kia ora I like the way you make the wind sound so interesting makes me feel like the wind is using the force on me. Maybe you can change the font to make it more clear, and I hope you will reply.
Hi Miria I love the way you have written you can smell the wind lifting the pollen. One question why did you write about wind? To improve could you describe how the wind feels when it tickles you.
Hi Miria I liked the way you said that you can taste the wind ,you did inspired me. Next step could you change your font to a easy font to see. When you tasted the wind what did it taste like? how fast was it dying in your throat Antonia
Hi Miria I liked how you used full stops all the time. Maybe next time use a different font so we can see if you have used capital letters in diffrent places. Tulsi
Kia ora
ReplyDeleteI like the way you make the wind sound so interesting makes me feel like the wind is using the force on me. Maybe you can change the font to make it more clear, and I hope you will reply.
,from Qaiden
Hi Miria
ReplyDeleteI love the way you have written you can smell the wind lifting the pollen.
One question why did you write about wind?
To improve could you describe how the wind feels when it tickles you.
Hi Miria
ReplyDeleteI liked the way you said that you can taste the wind ,you did inspired me.
Next step could you change your font to a easy font to see.
When you tasted the wind what did it taste like?
how fast was it dying in your throat
Antonia
Hi Miria
ReplyDeleteI liked how you used full stops all the time.
Maybe next time use a different font so we can see if you have used capital letters in diffrent places.
Tulsi